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Old 02-14-2009, 08:34 PM
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I liked Burn and the Gauntlet.

I like action and character development. There are so many characters thats its hard to remember whats going on between them. It might be more interesting if they get closer to each other. Having challenges that have a lot of teamwork might work.

Its your story. You might want to find another place to post it so more people would read it. There are websites where you'll get more feedback.
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