Soldak Home   Drox Operative   Din's Curse   Depths of Peril   Zombasite  

Go Back   Soldak Entertainment Forums > Zombasite > Zombasite
Register FAQ Members List Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
  #1  
Old 07-22-2015, 10:58 AM
Shadow's Avatar
Shadow Shadow is offline
Super Moderator
 
Join Date: Jun 2007
Location: Dallas, TX
Posts: 8,739
Default Zombasite - Targ and Zombie Targ

We posted 2 monster profiles today from our upcoming zombie, action RPG, Zombasite. You can check out the Targ and Zombie Targ on the Zombasite monster page.
__________________
Steven Peeler
Designer/programmer
Depths of Peril, Kivi's Underworld, Din's Curse, Drox Operative, Zombasite, & Din's Legacy
Patreon
Reply With Quote
  #2  
Old 07-22-2015, 11:40 AM
joku joku is offline
Champion
 
Join Date: Jul 2010
Posts: 189
Default

There is a typo.

Quote:
Variants: Variants: Ferocious Targ (shown), Fury Targ, Berserk Targ, Frenzy Targ, and Insane Targ
Reply With Quote
  #3  
Old 07-22-2015, 11:47 AM
Shadow's Avatar
Shadow Shadow is offline
Super Moderator
 
Join Date: Jun 2007
Location: Dallas, TX
Posts: 8,739
Default

Fixed. Thanks.
__________________
Steven Peeler
Designer/programmer
Depths of Peril, Kivi's Underworld, Din's Curse, Drox Operative, Zombasite, & Din's Legacy
Patreon
Reply With Quote
  #4  
Old 08-04-2015, 12:22 PM
Roswitha Roswitha is offline
Elite
 
Join Date: Nov 2008
Posts: 691
Default

Just a couple of notes.

"Even though the Zombasite (zombie parasites) are out of control"
In the Overview, you described the Zombasite as a singular entity. So, parasites should be singular and "are" should be "is".

Frenzy Targ - "This armor plated reptile is named..." Need a dash between armor and plated.

Zombie Frenzy Targ - "thus they go into their frenzy mode much easier." "easier" should be "more easily". You're using an adjective to describe a verb.
Reply With Quote
  #5  
Old 08-04-2015, 12:47 PM
Shadow's Avatar
Shadow Shadow is offline
Super Moderator
 
Join Date: Jun 2007
Location: Dallas, TX
Posts: 8,739
Default

Quote:
Originally Posted by Roswitha View Post
"Even though the Zombasite (zombie parasites) are out of control"
In the Overview, you described the Zombasite as a singular entity. So, parasites should be singular and "are" should be "is".
Most of this is fixed.

I usually use the word Zombasite like we would when saying the Plague. I'm not trying to imply that it is one entity, but one disease. Disease isn't really the right word, but it's close enough.
__________________
Steven Peeler
Designer/programmer
Depths of Peril, Kivi's Underworld, Din's Curse, Drox Operative, Zombasite, & Din's Legacy
Patreon
Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 07:59 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.6.7
Copyright ©2000 - 2018, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Copyright 2007 - 2016 Soldak Entertainment, Inc.